Spoonie
08-21-2006, 10:14 AM
I finally got the time to write a script for this. This is just the first part though. I'll need feed back please;)
INT. HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM - NIGHT
A young African American lady screams for help as she gives birth, but DOCTOR. ERIC THOMAS knows that the premature child may not make it.
A nurse shrieks at the sight of the child, it’s a boy that is missing a right hand. DOCTOR. THOMAS looks at the child, horror stricken and suddenly notices that the mother of the child is unconscious. DOCTOR THOMAS checks for a heartbeat but there’s none and the pulse machine makes a long noise that confirmed she was dead and so was the child.
JACOB sits outside the room, staring intently at the floor. He is worried for his wife, he is aware that the child would be premature and that makes him even more scared. We see fear in his eyes as he stares at the door leading to the emergency room. Suddenly DOCTOR. THOMAS comes out and JACOB stands up immediately and hurries towards him.
THOMAS
(Apologetically)
We did everything possible Jacob.
JACOB
(confused)
What do you mean?.
THOMAS
Your wife had a son… the child didn’t make it.
JACOB
(Eyes closed)
My wife?.
THOMAS
(shaking his head)
I’m sorry
He walks away as JACOB stays standing with tears dripping from his eyes. Meanwhile, a man appears in the room where the dead baby is kept, his face cannot be seen. A knife appears on his left hand and he cuts some skin from his right hand and forges a new one for the child. He places it where it should be and the baby begins to glow. At that moment DOCTOR THOMAS enters the room and stares in awe.
THOMAS
(Yelling)
What are you doing here?. You’re not meant to be …
The man raises his hand towards DOCTOR THOMAS and a great white light covers the entire hospital. The moment the light is no more, the man is nowhere to be found. DOCTOR THOMAS stares at the child that is wide awake
THOMAS
(Smiling)
Hey there, ready to see your daddy
Moments later Jacob is taken to see his son, he sits down beside the incubator and wipes the tears from his eyes
JACOB
Don’t worry son, I’ll take care of you… I promise.
INT. REDSTONE CAFÉ- DAY
MARCUS and JENNY sit down having a cup of coffee. MARCUS had black hair and was quite tall while JENNY was a brunette that claimed hardly had time for boys. They were both waiting for ADAM to show up because it was his sixteenth birthday and they wanted to celebrate.
JENNY
(sighing)
Jeez, where could he be?.
MARCUS
(Looking around)
Maybe on an errand for his father.
JENNY
He should try calling to say so.
MARCUS
(smiling)
Well, I’m having a good time.
JENNY
Keep dreaming Marcus, this is not a date and if u even think of telling anyone that it is I’ll…
ADAM
(panting)
Hi guys, sorry I’m late. My father…
JENNY
Save it, happy birthday Adam.
ADAM
Thanks Jen.
MARCUS
(shaking Adam’s hand)
Happy birthday pal.
ADAM
Thanks man.
JENNY
What are we waiting for,
let’s go everyone’s obviously waiting over at the hall.
In the corner of the restaurant, a young man watches ADAM as he walks out of the café. After looking at him for a while he smiles and whispers to himself “The Right Hand”.
INT. JAMES RESIDENCE- NIGHT
ADAM walks in looking tired, JACOB stares at him for a while trying to see if his son is drunk
ADAM
Hey dad.
JACOB
Hello son. How was the party?.
ADAM
Pretty cool.
JACOB
You didn’t drink, did you?.
ADAM
(sighs)
No dad, I didn’t.
JACOB
(smiles)
Cant believe you’re already sixteen. I can still remember sitting beside the incubator you were put in when you were born, now here you are coming home at 11PM. I should ground your ass
ADAM
(Laughing)
Goodnight dad (he walks upstairs)
ADAM gets some sleep but is woken up by a cracking noise he hears from downstairs. He creeps down looking around and turns on the kitchen lights expecting to see his father eating something but instead, it’s the man from the café.
ADAM
What the…?
GABRIEL
Hello Adam, I’m Gabriel
ADAM wastes no time and tries to run for the phone but suddenly he is no longer home, just in a vast white room with two chairs on the centre, Gabriel sitting on one of them wearing a white suit.
GABRIEL
Would you like to sit down?.
ADAM
(Shouting)
How the hell!?.
GABRIEL
Relax my friend. I have been sent here to give you a message.
ADAM
A message? What happened to just waking up in the morning and seeing messages in the damn mailbox?.
GABRIEL
Adam, I said relax
ADAM
What are you gonna do?, shoot me?
GABRIEL raises his hand toward ADAM and he falls on the chair, feeling calm all of a sudden.
ADAM
Huh?.
GABRIEL
(Smiling)
Good, now, what I’m about to tell you wont sink in too well because you’re basically a mortal and from my experience mortals don’t really believe anything that cant be explained by science. It always has to be paranormal.
ADAM
Man, what the hell are you talking about?
GABRIEL
I’d appreciate it if you wouldn’t use the word “hell” in that manner again. Tell me, ever heard of Angel Gabriel
ADAM
What does that have to do with anything?
GABRIEL
(still smiling)
Please answer
ADAM
Yes I have and if this is about me missing Church last Sunday and you happen to represent them I’ll tell you now, I wasn’t faking the flu I had
GABRIEL
That’s not why I’m here and yes, you were faking the flu. You, my friend are the right hand, chosen by the Archangel Michael himself to uphold the balance between Earth, Heaven and hell. You see… a very long time ago a treaty was signed between Heaven and Hell. The treaty stated that neither party is allowed to ever interfere with the affairs of mankind. Well, Hell didn’t follow the agreement, human beings are being possessed everyday by demons. The leader of Heaven, God, is still not willing to break that agreement even though The Devil already has, so Michael decided to take care of the issue himself. You are the product, you were born without a right hand and lifeless, Michael gave you part of his hand and gave you life as well but you are not fully human, you are his instrument on Earth that will take care of the matter.
ADAM
(confused)
Say what?
GABRIEL
(Sighs)
You know, I really wished you’d be able to understand all that without taking the long way to explain.
To be continued…
INT. HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM - NIGHT
A young African American lady screams for help as she gives birth, but DOCTOR. ERIC THOMAS knows that the premature child may not make it.
A nurse shrieks at the sight of the child, it’s a boy that is missing a right hand. DOCTOR. THOMAS looks at the child, horror stricken and suddenly notices that the mother of the child is unconscious. DOCTOR THOMAS checks for a heartbeat but there’s none and the pulse machine makes a long noise that confirmed she was dead and so was the child.
JACOB sits outside the room, staring intently at the floor. He is worried for his wife, he is aware that the child would be premature and that makes him even more scared. We see fear in his eyes as he stares at the door leading to the emergency room. Suddenly DOCTOR. THOMAS comes out and JACOB stands up immediately and hurries towards him.
THOMAS
(Apologetically)
We did everything possible Jacob.
JACOB
(confused)
What do you mean?.
THOMAS
Your wife had a son… the child didn’t make it.
JACOB
(Eyes closed)
My wife?.
THOMAS
(shaking his head)
I’m sorry
He walks away as JACOB stays standing with tears dripping from his eyes. Meanwhile, a man appears in the room where the dead baby is kept, his face cannot be seen. A knife appears on his left hand and he cuts some skin from his right hand and forges a new one for the child. He places it where it should be and the baby begins to glow. At that moment DOCTOR THOMAS enters the room and stares in awe.
THOMAS
(Yelling)
What are you doing here?. You’re not meant to be …
The man raises his hand towards DOCTOR THOMAS and a great white light covers the entire hospital. The moment the light is no more, the man is nowhere to be found. DOCTOR THOMAS stares at the child that is wide awake
THOMAS
(Smiling)
Hey there, ready to see your daddy
Moments later Jacob is taken to see his son, he sits down beside the incubator and wipes the tears from his eyes
JACOB
Don’t worry son, I’ll take care of you… I promise.
INT. REDSTONE CAFÉ- DAY
MARCUS and JENNY sit down having a cup of coffee. MARCUS had black hair and was quite tall while JENNY was a brunette that claimed hardly had time for boys. They were both waiting for ADAM to show up because it was his sixteenth birthday and they wanted to celebrate.
JENNY
(sighing)
Jeez, where could he be?.
MARCUS
(Looking around)
Maybe on an errand for his father.
JENNY
He should try calling to say so.
MARCUS
(smiling)
Well, I’m having a good time.
JENNY
Keep dreaming Marcus, this is not a date and if u even think of telling anyone that it is I’ll…
ADAM
(panting)
Hi guys, sorry I’m late. My father…
JENNY
Save it, happy birthday Adam.
ADAM
Thanks Jen.
MARCUS
(shaking Adam’s hand)
Happy birthday pal.
ADAM
Thanks man.
JENNY
What are we waiting for,
let’s go everyone’s obviously waiting over at the hall.
In the corner of the restaurant, a young man watches ADAM as he walks out of the café. After looking at him for a while he smiles and whispers to himself “The Right Hand”.
INT. JAMES RESIDENCE- NIGHT
ADAM walks in looking tired, JACOB stares at him for a while trying to see if his son is drunk
ADAM
Hey dad.
JACOB
Hello son. How was the party?.
ADAM
Pretty cool.
JACOB
You didn’t drink, did you?.
ADAM
(sighs)
No dad, I didn’t.
JACOB
(smiles)
Cant believe you’re already sixteen. I can still remember sitting beside the incubator you were put in when you were born, now here you are coming home at 11PM. I should ground your ass
ADAM
(Laughing)
Goodnight dad (he walks upstairs)
ADAM gets some sleep but is woken up by a cracking noise he hears from downstairs. He creeps down looking around and turns on the kitchen lights expecting to see his father eating something but instead, it’s the man from the café.
ADAM
What the…?
GABRIEL
Hello Adam, I’m Gabriel
ADAM wastes no time and tries to run for the phone but suddenly he is no longer home, just in a vast white room with two chairs on the centre, Gabriel sitting on one of them wearing a white suit.
GABRIEL
Would you like to sit down?.
ADAM
(Shouting)
How the hell!?.
GABRIEL
Relax my friend. I have been sent here to give you a message.
ADAM
A message? What happened to just waking up in the morning and seeing messages in the damn mailbox?.
GABRIEL
Adam, I said relax
ADAM
What are you gonna do?, shoot me?
GABRIEL raises his hand toward ADAM and he falls on the chair, feeling calm all of a sudden.
ADAM
Huh?.
GABRIEL
(Smiling)
Good, now, what I’m about to tell you wont sink in too well because you’re basically a mortal and from my experience mortals don’t really believe anything that cant be explained by science. It always has to be paranormal.
ADAM
Man, what the hell are you talking about?
GABRIEL
I’d appreciate it if you wouldn’t use the word “hell” in that manner again. Tell me, ever heard of Angel Gabriel
ADAM
What does that have to do with anything?
GABRIEL
(still smiling)
Please answer
ADAM
Yes I have and if this is about me missing Church last Sunday and you happen to represent them I’ll tell you now, I wasn’t faking the flu I had
GABRIEL
That’s not why I’m here and yes, you were faking the flu. You, my friend are the right hand, chosen by the Archangel Michael himself to uphold the balance between Earth, Heaven and hell. You see… a very long time ago a treaty was signed between Heaven and Hell. The treaty stated that neither party is allowed to ever interfere with the affairs of mankind. Well, Hell didn’t follow the agreement, human beings are being possessed everyday by demons. The leader of Heaven, God, is still not willing to break that agreement even though The Devil already has, so Michael decided to take care of the issue himself. You are the product, you were born without a right hand and lifeless, Michael gave you part of his hand and gave you life as well but you are not fully human, you are his instrument on Earth that will take care of the matter.
ADAM
(confused)
Say what?
GABRIEL
(Sighs)
You know, I really wished you’d be able to understand all that without taking the long way to explain.
To be continued…